Comments on: CONTEST ENTRY #6

By: Joyce

Joyce — Wed, 01 Apr 2009 00:34:24 +0000

I enjoyed this a lot. Lots of tension and I love where she kicks him in the shin. It makes me want to read the whole story!

By: Liz

Liz — Tue, 31 Mar 2009 23:48:17 +0000

Well, I like it. Very descriptive.

By: Alicia

Alicia — Tue, 31 Mar 2009 20:22:57 +0000

This is one of your favorites? I didn’t know. I’m glad I picked it then! I couldn’t decide whether to choose a scene with outright conflict, like this one, or one with more subtle tension. Took me a while to decide.

Thanks for the wonderful compliments, Sarah!

By: Sarah

Sarah — Tue, 31 Mar 2009 15:59:43 +0000

As I can find nothing to fix here, I have to say that the conflict is strong.
I absolutely love this story.
Of course, you had many conflicting scenes you could’ve chosen from, but this is one of my favorites.