On the Querytracker.net forum, they had a section for bad queries. I wrote this a year ago.
Dear Bob,
ZARA, PRINCESS OF THE SHORE PEOPLE is a middle grade, juvenal, teenager style book about a sixteen year old girl who must rule her people to keep them from drowning. (See they live by the ocean, but they can’t swim on account of “The Curse of the Sea Serpent Hazar.” (That’s the name of book two, but I won’t go into that because I read somewhere that agents don’t want you to list other books in a series.) Anyway, the Shore People can’t swim and with the oceans rising because of the melting icebergs, (see my book is politically correct) she must get them to higher ground so that they don’t die.
ZARA, PRINCESS OF THE SHORE PEOPLE is completed at 40,238 words. At least I think. I lost track and had to start over like fifty times.
I will be happy to send you my MS as soon as possible. (Oh yeah, my boyfriend, Hunter, drew this really hot picture of me in my Halloween costume and I was like OMG! that’s what Zara looks like! So I’m enclosing it so you can see what she looks like. He can do the cover for the book if you want.
Thanks, Zara Lane
Email me at, sexsellsbooks@hotmail.com
This is my mom’s email address. She won’t let me have one because she says there’s too much sex on the Internet.
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So here’s what we’re going to do. Write a bad query. My favorite will win a leather desk set.
Contest open to US residents only.
Ends July 10th @ midnight. I’ll announce the winner Sat. July 11th.
***First Five Sentence Critique starts tomorrow so email your entry in today!***
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Sarah is writer looking for an agent. She is currently working on novel # 4, editing novels 2 and 3, and querying novel # 1. For more insight to her work, visit: http://legendoftheprotectors.wordpress.com/ or http://legendoftheprotectors.blogspot.com/
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ooh–this should be fun =)
I’ll get something prepared!
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By Eden Tyler on 06.27.09 11:43 am | Permalink
I envy any one that can write. I am not very good at it. Thank you for the kind comment!
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By Liz on 06.27.09 4:38 pm | Permalink
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