The first sentence is great, though the “Amazon jungle” bit is a little out-of-nowhere, and the whole thing could probably be tightened. Even just saying “Amazon jungle” instead of “jungle of the Amazon,” for example, would keep you from having two “of” phrases in a row. Also, I’m pretty sure you meant “saving her life temporarily.” Really, though, I think you could just say, “saving herself from the men . . .”

Also, I was a little thrown by the end of the first sentence. She hopes the jungle will be the least of her worries? Does she hope she’ll have bigger problems?

But overall, great hook! Good luck with it!

You go from: “takes a man over a cliff with her (AWESOME), saving her life temporally (spelling?) from the men who killed her partner” to “But as it turns out, he’s DEA, and possibly responsible for her partner’s death.” So she saved the life of her partner’s killer?

I think if you could take out the first sentence of the second paragraph, it would be tighter and less confusing.

Great job though!

That is what confuses me. I’m sure there are d

But, this is a GOOD hook.
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