I like the query a lot. The punctuation in the first paragraph could be sorted out a bit, and I’d really like to see a new sentence for She dreams of murders that actually happen . . . as they’re happening. For the first sentence, you might try . . . has vivid dreams – nightmares that take her inside the mind of a killer.

The query is a very good length, and you do a great job laying out your credentials. You might want to change this edgy, young adult urban fantasy to the edgy YA urban fantasy – “this” to “the” because you then follow with the title, and removing the comma after “edgy” because both “YA urban fantasy” is a genre by itself, not a list of adjectives.

In the previous paragraph, I would rework the first sentence a little: Sam finds herself attracted not only to . . . but to one of the Flesh Eaters. This makes the parallel construction of the sentence clearer and avoids repetition of “monster” with the next sentence.

I would also remove If you would like to consider my novel, as the agent can probably guess that’s why you’re contacting her/him.

Good stuff!

I like it.

Also… I never realized this before, but I am TOTALLY tripping over the Paw-pa. Like, I have no idea how that would be said irl lol!