First Five Sentence Critique #1

A white cotton sheet twisted around Devin’s naked body. She couldn’t believe how glorious making love to Jonathan felt. The wait had been well worth it. He had mastered the art completely in the four days since they’d married. At least in her mind.

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First Five Sentence Critique #2

Ankou enjoyed delaying pleasure—stretching the game out until he couldn’t stand it any longer. Killing a faery was a rare occasion and so when the opportunity presented itself, as it did this day, he made sure to savor it.

The blonde lovely had given birth, and her unexpected pain satisfied Ankou immensely. He had thought she would be stronger, but it was to his benefit she was not. Such suffering was gratifying.

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First Five Sentence Critique #3

Alexis looked at the clock and realized she was running late. Again. Try as she might, her mornings never changed.

Each day started with an abrupt awakening, followed by a writing session. She wrote down any and all details of her otherworldly dreams in her journal.

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First Five Sentence Critique #4

His shaking hands went into his hair again and he let his fingers dig down to scratch his filthy scalp. When was the last time he took a shower?  Truman didn’t know.  He was obsessed.  He lit another cigarette and using his bare feet as leverage against the cluttered desk, he pushed himself back.

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First Five Sentence Critique #5

I held my breath and dove into the crawl space just before the beam of a flashlight swept across the wall.

The echo of police boots trailed away. After a thirty count—to make sure they’d left—I exhaled, tried not to throw up, and checked for the gem in my pocket.
Still there. Good.

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First Five Sentence Critique #6

Madison couldn’t wait for her trip to be over.  One would think that attending an event planning conference in gorgeous Napa Valley would be a trip to remember.  Well, in one aspect it was a memorable trip, the shopping in Napa Valley was fabulous!  From touring local wineries and stocking up on hard to get wines, outlet shopping and finding those one of a kind shops in quaint little villages, Madison could safely say that she satisfied her compulsive urges to shop.

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